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Stakes are the reason that audiences

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become invested in your story.

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Stakes are the things that make an

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audience worry or wonder, makes them

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curious, makes them root for you,

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makes them hope for your demise.

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Stakes are essential to a story.

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They are the things that make people

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want to hear the end of the story.

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They're the things that drive

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people to the end of the story.

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There are several types of stakes

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that you can deploy in a story,

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and all can be very powerful.

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The most important stake of all

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is what I call the elephant.

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I call it the elephant

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because it's enormous.

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It's enormously important to a story.

The Elephant: Defining the Need, Want, or Mystery

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The elephant is essentially the initial

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signpost to the audience that says,

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"This is what my story is about, at

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least for now." In a movie, we don't

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really need an elephant because what

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we have today is movie trailers.

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When we go into a movie, we

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kinda know what we're gonna see.

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If we're going into a Mission Impossible

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movie, we know what the stakes are.

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The world is in danger and

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Tom Cruise must save the day.

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When we walk into a romantic

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comedy, we know what the stakes

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are, what the elephant is.

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It is two people are not in love.

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Will they be in love by

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the end of the movie?

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Those are the stakes.

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But when we're speaking, telling

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a story, delivering a sales pitch,

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speaking at a conference, delivering a

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keynote, nobody knows really what we're

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going to say as we open our mouths.

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We need to give them a reason

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right away to be invested in that

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story with what I call an elephant.

Case Study 1: The Spoon of Power (Establishing the Goal)

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Standing in the playground behind

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my school beside this enormous pile

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of leaves, and this tiny little hand

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comes out of the leaves with a silver

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metallic object in it, and the boy

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attached to the hand, he says, "Look,

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Mr. Dix, a spoon." And it, it's a spoon.

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It's a ordinary kitchen spoon,

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probably fell out of a lunchbox

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earlier that day or 10 years ago.

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But I say, "No, Jamie, that's the spoon

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of power." And now that I've declared

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it to be the spoon of power, I must

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have it because that is who I am.

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And Jamie knows this.

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I can see it on the look in his face,

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and he knows that I know it, and I

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know that he knows that I know it,

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and all of this is true 'cause he's

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running before he says anything else.

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And the 74 kids that I'm supposed

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to be monitoring closely are lost

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to me, and the only thing I focus

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on is a little redheaded boy with

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a spoon that I must now have.

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And we run across the field, and we

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climb up the slide and through the

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tubes, and 17 minutes later, the bell

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rings, and that little boy still has

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the spoon, and I can't believe it.

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The spoon of power.

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It's a very similar

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elephant to the beginning.

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A spoon has made an appearance

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in a little boy's hand, and

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Matt must now have that spoon.

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Will he get the spoon?

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That is the elephant that I present

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at the beginning of the story.

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It's actually the elephant or the

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stake that carries us through much

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of the story until he eventually

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puts it on a chain around his neck,

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and then the elephant changes.

Case Study 2: The New Hampshire Breakdown (Establishing the Problem)

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It's it's 1991, and I'm 20 years old,

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and I'm driving home from the very

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first booty call of my entire life.

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And I am excited because I don't know

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that this is going to also be the very

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last booty call of my entire life.

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And then it's in that moment of excitement

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that the right front tire of my 1976 Chevy

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Malibu blows out, but it doesn't deflate.

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It disintegrates.

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It throws rober- rubber on the road in

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a way that I didn't think was possible,

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and it takes everything I can to get the

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car over to the shoulder and to a stop.

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And it's 1991.

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I don't have a cell phone,

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so I do the only thing I can.

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I start hiking up the

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road to look for help.

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Seven hours later, after giving all

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of my money to a half-naked mountain

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man named Winston, I have a bald

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tire on my car, and I'm heading

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home when I look at the instrument

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panel, and I see that I have no gas.

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And all of the money that I

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have is in Winston's hand.

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And it's 1991.

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I don't have a credit card.

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I don't have an ATM card.

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I don't even have a checking account.

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And so I take the next exit, and I

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roll my car into a Getty station.

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And as I park the car,

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I'm angry, and I'm sad.

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I'm 20 years old.

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I'm a McDonald's manager.

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I make $7.25 an hour, and I'm

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the richest person I know.

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My mother is living on

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welfare with my sister.

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My father's left 10 years ago, and the

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only friend that I have who even has

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a credit card or a car that can make

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this 100-mile trip to New Hampshire

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is off on some college weekend,

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and I can't get in touch with him.

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And this was not the plan for my life.

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I was not supposed to be this alone.

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And so I go into the Getty

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station to beg for gas.

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$8 worth of gas is all I need 'cause

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it's 1991 and gas is 85 cents a gallon.

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And the kid behind the counter

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will not give it to me.

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He doesn't wanna lose his job, and

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I offer everything, and he says no.

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So I go back to my car.

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My plan is to wait for

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the next shift change.

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Maybe someone more

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sympathetic will take over.

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But as I climb into my car, I see

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my McDonald's uniform crumpled

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in the back, and I have an idea.

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The initial elephant, the question, the

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curiosity, the reason you wanna be driven

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home to the end of the story is Matt

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has a flat tire, and he has no money.

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How will he get home?

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That is the stake.

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That is the elephant at the beginning

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of the story that will grab your

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attention and cause you to wonder,

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how will this problem be solved?

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If you're a problem solver, the

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kind of person that likes to puzzle

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things out, you might have actually

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started to think about solutions

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for me, solutions on my behalf.

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Something that happened 30 years ago

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you're worried about now and wondering

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how I was gonna get out of it.

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The goal of an elephant is to

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give an audience a reason to be

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immediately invested in the story.

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How will Matt get out of New Hampshire?

Giving the Audience a Reason to Wonder

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An hour later, I'm in a

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residential neighborhood about

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a mile from the Getty station.

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I'm on the porch of a red brick

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house, and I'm knocking on the door.

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I'm wearing my McDonald's uniform, the

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blue shirt, the blue pants, the blue tie.

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The door opens, and there's a man

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standing in front of me, and I know at

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that moment that this is a bad idea.

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But it's 3:00 on a Sunday

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afternoon, and I'm on his porch in

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a McDonald's uniform, and the only

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way to get off is to go forward.

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So I say to him, "My name is Matt.

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I'm collecting money for the Ronald

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McDonald Children's Charities. Can

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you please make a donation?" And this

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man stares at me like Stonehenge.

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He does not move.

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He's 50, but he might as well be 500.

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He is all of the wisdom and knowledge

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of the world wrapped into one man,

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and I know he knows I'm lying.

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And the next words that come

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out of my mouth I don't expect.

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I say, "My mom died of cancer when I was

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young- … and my sister has cancer now,

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and I'm just trying to do what I can to

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help." And he looks at me and points and

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says, "You stay right there." And he goes

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back into the house and closes the door.

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And I know that he's calling the police,

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and I'm going to get arrested for stealing

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money from McDonald's, which ironically

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two years later will actually happen.

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But not on this day.

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Because he comes back to the door and he

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has $20 in his hand, which is like $20,000

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to me on this day, and he presses it into

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my palm and I say, "No, that's too much."

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And he says to me, "My wife died of cancer

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five years ago, and I think this is a

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really bad idea I had." And before I know

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it, I am sitting on the porch with this

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man, and he asks me about what my mother

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died of, and I say breast cancer 'cause

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it's the first one that pops to my mind.

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And he says, "What does your sister have?"

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And I say leukemia, which I don't actually

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know is a cancer, but I know kids get it.

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And he tells me that his wife

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Lisa died of lung cancer and that

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his kids live on the West Coast.

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And he tells me how she struggled

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for two years and how he wanted to

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tell her it was okay to go, but he

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couldn't, and how badly he felt that

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he watched her struggle for so long.

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And I sat on that porch and I listened

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to him and I prayed he wouldn't ask me

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anything, and I just wanted to get off.

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And so finally we were hugging and

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I was walking down the walk with $20

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in my hand and it felt like poison.

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I got to my car and I sat in there

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and I remembered how lonely I felt,

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and then I felt so stupid and small,

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'cause I knew at that moment I

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didn't understand real loneliness.

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I was a 20-year-old kid with friends

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and I was stuck in New Hampshire.

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But I had walked away from a man

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who was in a tiny house with a wife

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that was gone and the kids that were

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gone, and he had a loneliness in

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him that I would never understand.

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And so I put the gas in

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my car and I drove home.

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But he has always been with me.

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I have never left that man on that porch

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that day, and I'm hopeful that I'll

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never be as lonely as he was that day.

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Thank you.

Advanced Technique: Changing the Color of the Elephant

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I say that elephants can change their

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color, meaning the primary stake of a

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story, the primary reason we're invested

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in a character, that can change over time,

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as it did in the story you just heard.

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The initial elephant is will

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Matt find a way to get out of New

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Hampshire with no gas and no money?

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Eventually, that elephant changes colors.

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When I end up on the porch in front of

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a blue door with a man who's talking

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to me about the death of his wife,

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it's no longer a concern how I'm

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going to get out of New Hampshire.

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That stake is now gone.

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There's a new stake.

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How is Matt going to

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deal with this situation?

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But there has to be that

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elephant in a story all the time.

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There has to be a reason that the

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audience is invested in what is

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happening to the character, the

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product, the company, the CEO.

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Whoever is speaking, there

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has to be an elephant.

How Legendary Communicators Use This Structural Framework

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When Steve Jobs takes the stage and says-

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This is a day I've been looking

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forward to for two and a half years.

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"I have been waiting two and a half years

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to tell you this." That's the elephant.

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It is, "I have news that's going

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to blow you away. I have been

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waiting a long time to share this

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with you." That is the elephant.

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We must open our stories with an elephant.

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The other stakes I'm gonna

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discuss, they're all optional,

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but this one is essential.

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We have to have something to invest

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our audience in, to make them feel

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like they are with us and that they

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wanna get to the end to find out

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how things are going to turn out.

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We open with an elephant,

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the first and most important

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stake in every story we tell.

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